Today, TV channels focus more on men’s sport than on women’s sport. Why has this happened? Should TV give equal time to women’s sports and men’s sports?

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Nowadays,many find that there are more male
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activities
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than female
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sport
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activities
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on
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. I will explain in
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is the case and why the
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should give equal
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to male and female
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. In my view,
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for the issue is that there are more males than females among
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sport
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lovers. Given
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, more
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sport
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channels choose to play the man’s competitive
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to
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more audiences to improve their audience rating. By doing
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, they can make more money from advertisements. Another possible cause contributing to
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trend is competitive
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require very high physical fitness because
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needs
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a lot of energy.
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male athletes
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more than female athletes, so there are more male
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activities
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television. An often-overlooked factor
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issue is the
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of male
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is more
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than women so
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TV
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managers have to choose more male competitive
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. I believe it is significant for
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programs to give equal
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to both male and female
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. First of all female consumption ability is higher than
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, if there are more
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activities
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on
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, more female
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may well be attracted by it. Given
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not only can improve the
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audience rating
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but
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can help to increase some companies’ profits,
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as sportswear companies and the program sponsor’s company.
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, more female
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programs may well attract more women to participate in exercises. By doing so, it can help people to improve their physical fitness, and some women who
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shy or don’t want to be suntanned
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may well choose to exercise indoors, like gym and fitness rooms.
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, it can increase their earnings too.
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, there are obvious reasons for
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trend, and I tend to side with the opinion that the television program should give equal
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to both male and female
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sport
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activities
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.Today,
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channels focus more on men’s
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than on women’s
sport
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. Why has
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happened? Should
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give equal
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to women’s
sports
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and men’s
sports
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?
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