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The given chart shows the number of immigration and emigration in the UK from 1999 to 2008.

The given chart shows the number of immigration and emigration in the UK from 1999 to 2008.
The chart gives information about the
number
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 of
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immigration
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immigrants
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 and
emigration
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 per
thousands
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thousand
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 between 1999 to 2008 in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of
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immigration
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immigrants
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 always was more than
emigration
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. The
number
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 of
migration
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migrants
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 per
thousands
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thousand
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 was the highest in 2004 and was the lowest in 2003. In the case of
immigration
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, approximately 450000
of
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apply
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British individuals migrated in 1999,
while
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this
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 figure was about 300000 for
emigration
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. During the given period,
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immigration
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the immigration
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 rate
was
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apply
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gradually increased to
near
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nearly
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 600000 in 2008.
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, the
number
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 of
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emigration
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emigrants
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 among British people rose in
this
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 period,
exept
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except
expect
 between 2006 to 2007, with significantly decreased from 400000 to almost 350000 respectively. Between 1999
to
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and
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 2003, the
number
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 of
migration made
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migrants
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 fluctuation, but always stood near
100000to
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100000 to
 200000, with the highest in 2001
by
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at
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 about 180000. In 2004 and 2007, the rate of migration was the highest
amon
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among
 British with almost 220000 and 210000 respectively.
This
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number
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was
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has
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 declined in the
last
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 year to less than 200000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, immigration, emigration with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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