IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6.5

The map below show the village of Stockefort in 1930 and in 2010

The map below show the village of Stockefort in 1930 and in 2010
#show #village #stockefort
The maps compare how the village of Stockefort changed in 1930 and the new version in 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that the
farmland
has
Verb problem
was
show examples
 demolished,
while
 accommodations were increased in 2010.
At
Change preposition
On
show examples
east
Add an article
the east
show examples
 side of the map, there was
a
Remove the article
apply
show examples
farmland
 and a few
building
Fix the agreement mistake
buildings
show examples
 (
primary
Correct article usage
a primary
show examples
 school and gardens);
farmland
Correct article usage
the farmland
show examples
 had
destroyed
Add a missing verb
been destroyed
show examples
 and
replanced
Correct your spelling
replaced
replanted
 with
new
Correct article usage
a new
show examples
residental
Correct your spelling
residential
 area in 2010,
the
Correct word choice
and the
show examples
 gardens had
resized
Add a missing verb
been resized
show examples
 to be smaller than
1930
Change preposition
in 1930
show examples
, which only
cover
Wrong verb form
covered
show examples
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
 large house. Meanwhile, there was
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
several
number of
Correct quantifier usage
apply
show examples
houses and road constructed in
this
 area,
which
Correct word choice
and
show examples
 the road and accommodations were placed
on
Change preposition
in
show examples
 the area that was
a
Remove the article
apply
show examples
farmland
 before.
However
, the primary school and
lage
Correct your spelling
large
 house had
expaned
Correct your spelling
expanded
,
which
Correct word choice
and
show examples
 the massive house
do
Wrong verb form
did
show examples
 not have
the
Correct article usage
an
show examples
 owner in 2013.
Likewise
, the
farmland
at
Change preposition
on
show examples
west
Add an article
the west
show examples
 side
had
Verb problem
was
show examples
 removed and replaced with new houses and ring roads, which
constructed
Add a missing verb
were constructed
show examples
 from the main street.
Although
 the post office not
changed
Wrong verb form
change
show examples
 in
this
 period, the shops next to
this
 building
was
Change the verb form
were
show examples
 changed to
new
Add an article
a new
the new
show examples
 road that
surround
Wrong verb form
was surrounded
show examples
 by accommodations.
Submitted by jirawat.sea on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words farmland with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
▼

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformation
  • infrastructure
  • facilities
  • landscape
  • sparse population
  • residential areas
  • commercial zones
  • recreational facilities
  • agricultural lands
  • local economy
  • transportation infrastructure
  • connectivity
  • public amenities
  • green spaces
  • quality of life
  • historical buildings
  • landmarks
  • preservation
  • urban development
  • environmental impacts
  • natural landscapes
What to do next:
Look at other essays: