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News has a big role and media influence as ever-before. Positive and negative development.

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News
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 possesses an opportunity to connect
people
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 with society
by
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 announcements which can impact on community either positively or negatively. In my opinion,
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 is
the
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a
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 positive development which can lead residents to know about all
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events or accidents. To initiate, nowadays many citizens have
an
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access to
news
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 by using either a tablet or a PC. In other words,
the
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news
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 companies provide followers
a
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huge information
such
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 as the
announcement
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announcements
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 of the government or some accidents which were committed to
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 day.
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, the current world has a huge number of apps
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 as
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Instagram where there are many
news
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 accounts and
people
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 can obtain the announce about crime in their region and be more careful or grateful for warn they can predict a public traffic on the way to work.
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, the necessary
news
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 is grateful, because
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 really can assist
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people
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's awareness.
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, there
are
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 a majority
fake
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of fake
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news
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in
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on
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 social media which can mislead inhabitants.
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, most
people
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 believe
to
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in
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 the first announcement without
proofs
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while
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 others continue to post
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additional wrong data on the social space thereby increasing disturbance among the population.
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,
according to
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 the report of the Security Department of Uzbekistan, the number of fake
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have
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 increased significantly
for
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last
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the last
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 two years,
also
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 the number of criminals who often steal money by announcing fake events where many
people
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 participate in order to increase their financial condition.
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, it has a negative effect on the community, because a majority of
people
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 can be deceived.
To conclude
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, there are two effects of
news
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 on society and all of them can lead to either positive or negative results. I strongly believe that
news
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 media can assist to
people
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 be more careful and keep awareness.
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