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The diagrams below show changes of a cinema from 1980 until now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show changes of a cinema from 1980 until now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps compare how current
cinema
 has changed since its renovation in 1980.
Overall
, it can be seen that the parking
area
 was gone, and
this
result
Wrong verb form
resulted
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 in there were new movie rooms
can be
Verb problem
apply
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introduced to 5 rooms, with new services. At the top of the map, the car park and
cinema
 2 have
removed
Add a missing verb
been removed
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 and replaced with four new
theaters
Change the spelling
theatres
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,
which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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3 of them located on the right side
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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were
Correct your spelling
where
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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cinema
 2 and
parking
Correct article usage
the parking
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area
 before. Followed by,
the
Capitalize word
The
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 rest room
was
Verb problem
had
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 not changed since 1980 and
this
 room was surrounded by new movie rooms from
top
Correct article usage
the top
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 and bottom sides, which
the
Correct article usage
apply
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cinema
Capitalize word
Cinema
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 1 has relocated to the front of the toilet. Turning to
bottom
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the bottom
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area
, the entrance
remain
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remains
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 the same
area
;
however
, the surrounding space experienced a renovation by
established
Wrong verb form
establishing
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 and
demolished
Wrong verb form
demolishing
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 some facilities. On the left side, a
relax
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relaxation
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 room and the
restaurants
Change to a genitive case
restaurant's
restaurants'
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 const have constructed in the
area
 that was
the
Correct article usage
apply
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cinema
 1,
while
 only the shop that can be purchase water was removed
in
Change preposition
on
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 the opposite sides, the ticket court was
styed
Correct your spelling
stayed
styled
 in
same
Change the article
the same
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area
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cinema, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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