The charts below show the chnages in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the chnages in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates how many hours were spent on ownership of electrical appliances, and doing housework in households in one country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
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, the usage of washing
machines
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was the highest in the beginning
year
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and started to fall
at the end
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of the given period.
In contrast
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, refrigerators peaked in the same
years
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. To start with the first three
years
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, washing
machines
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increased steadily from 1920 to 1960, which started at 40%, the refrigerator drastically increased to 90%, which beat the washing machine and vacuum cleaner both at 70%.
However
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, after 1960, washing
machines
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slightly decreased by the
year
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of 1980. During the decade, it witnessed working housework timings were continuously reduced
year
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by
year
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. At the same
time
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time,
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the refrigerator and vacuum cleaner jumped to 100% over the
years
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. Meanwhile, washing
machines
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were gradually going downwards at approximately 75% in 2019.
Finally
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, the working hours of the housework declined to 10 hours per week over the
years
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words machines, year, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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