Many people say that music plays an important role in society while others think it is simply a form of entertainment for individuals. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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has
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always been contradicting views among many
the
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people about
music
and its importance in the social circle.
Music
for some individuals is considered a form of relaxation
while
others oppose it. In my point of view, I support
music
is
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an integral part of life and society. In
this
fast-growing
world
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music
plays a vital for a few individuals to bring back the memories of patriotism among them. During the Independence Day
celebrations
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patriotic songs are often played in order to highlight the love for their country among the citizens.
In addition
to that, different countries connect with each other via
music
.
For instance
, the latest song “Together” released in India was composed by a French singer and sung by an Indian singer. Despite geographical barriers, two singers from different nations collaborated together to promote their cultures.
On the contrary
, a section of society believes that
music
is a form of relaxation and enjoyment. There are different forms of
music
for different occasions,
such
as calming
music
for meditation and jazz
music
for a party. People like to
listen
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songs after a hectic day at work or even at family get-togethers.
For instance
,
according to
the research survey conducted at the National Psychological Institute of India, it was noted that the mood of the individuals was affected by the genre of
music
. To sum it up, I strongly suggest that
music
is indeed an essential part of life for enjoyment and recreational purposes, but it should be kept in mind that
music
serves different needs of different people.
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