The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
report derives from the tables which illustrate the weather conditions and time of daylight in two cities, which are
London
and
Sydney
, in the same weekend that chosen from December 2018. A good starting point would be to say that
Sydney
was
more
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hotter than
London
over the period shown, and people who lived in
Sydney
could
take
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make
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profit
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from
sun
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the sun
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much better than Londoners. The first result worth pointing out is that
,
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sun
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the sun
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rose before
than
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in
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London
, at 05:45, whilst,
sun
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could be seen for nearly 15
hours
in
Sydney
at
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Friday
28th
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the 28th
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which was the coldest
day
for
Sydney
with
maximum
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a maximum
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26
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C
, and
minimum
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a minimum
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17
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C
over the three days.
On the other hand
,
in
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the same
day
,
London
lived the coldest
day
too, with
maximum
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9
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of 9
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C
, and
minimum
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a minimum
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4
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C
compared to the days shown.
However
,
this
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days
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sunrise time was 08:05 in
London
, and
sun
could be seen for approimately 8
hours
. Another information that can be observed is that, the hottest
day
for
Sydney
was sunday (like its name) 30th with maximum 31
C
, and minimum 19
C
conversely
this
day
was not the hottest
day
for
London
; Londeners could lived with hotter sunlight at Saturday 29th with maximum 13
C
, and minimum 3
C
. It can be
also
clearly seen from the tables, the amount of time that can be seen
sun
is nearly 8
hours
for
London
while
the
sun
can be seen for approximately in 15
hours
in
Sydney
.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words london, sydney, sun, hours, day, c with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • temperatures
  • hours of daylight
  • comparison
  • London
  • Sydney
  • December 2018
  • weekend
  • information
  • data
  • summarise
  • select
  • report
  • features
  • analysis
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