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the charts below give information on the ages of the populations of yemen and italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. summarize the information and make comparison. wrtie at least 150 words.

the charts below give information on the ages of the populations of yemen and italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. summarize the information and make comparison. wrtie at least 150 words.
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The
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 charts illustrate the data on the
ages
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 of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
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, it is noticeable that the figures are different no matter the same country or the same time, they all had and will have different data from each other. In 2000, Yemen children from 0-to 14
ages
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 took half of the
population
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,
it
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 was shown clearly on the
pie
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chart
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,
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that 15
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 to 59
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 of
age
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also
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 took almost half of the
pie
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chart
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, which was approximately to the previous
ages
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 with 46.3%, the least percentages belonged to elder
people
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 who 60
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 old or older with only 3.6%. Italy
people
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 who were 15-59
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 old ranked first in the
population
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 category with 61,6%, followed by the percentages of elder
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 with 24.1% and the
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 was
people
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 from 0-14
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, which had 10% different from the previous
age
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group
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. 50
years
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 later, in 2050, the
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 charts will fluctuate, with different data
due to
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 some changes. The
age
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group
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 that will take most of the
population
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 in
this
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 country is the 15-59
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 old
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, those teenagers and middle-aged
ages
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people
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 will make more than half of the
pie
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chart
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 with 57.3%, next up is children from 14
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 old or less, they will take 37%, and
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 rank belong to elder
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, which actually increase compared to 2000. In Italy's
population
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pie
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chart
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, it is noticeable that teenagers and the middle
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 groups with the elder
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 are approximate to each other with almost
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4% difference between them,
while
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 the small
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group
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 will receive 11.5%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pie, ages, population, chart, years, age, people, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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