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The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.

The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.
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The line graph below represents information about
residents
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 from the
UK
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 who visited different
countries
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 ,
as well as
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, tourists who visited the United Kingdom.
Also
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, there is the bar chart which illustrates
countries
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 which
UK
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 citizens preferred to visit in 1999. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it could be seen that major difference between the proportion of people who visited the
UK
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 and
UK
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residents
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 who visited other
countries
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.
Moreover
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, there is
also
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 a noticeable fact that France was a leader among other
countries
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 because people preferred to visit it more. In detail, from 1979 to 1986 the proportion of these two groups grew and in 1986 the number of visitors from the
UK
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 reached 20
million
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 and the number of tourists who visited the
UK
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 reached nearly 15
million
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.
After
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this
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 year, the proportion of
UK
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 visitors continued to rise gradually and in 1999 reached around 38
million
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.
Nevertheless
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, the number of
residents
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 who visited different
countries
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 increased significantly and in 1999 it was more than 50
million
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. Among
UK
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residents
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 the most popular country in 1999 was France more than 10
million
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 people visited it.
In addition
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, the second most popular country was Spain around 9
million
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 visited it.
However
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, the less popular country was Turkey only 3
million
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 individuals were there in 1999.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words residents, uk, countries, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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