Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sport facilities, others, However, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both views and give opinion.
Nowadays, there are many individuals who have extra weight and have unhealthy
lifestyle
. Fix the agreement mistake
lifestyles
As a result
, one group of people
reckons that in order to improve public health
authority
must Fix the agreement mistake
authorities
built
new Change the verb form
build
be built
sport
facilities. Change the noun form
sports
Nevertheless
, another group of people
believes that there will be no results if government
increase the number of Correct article usage
the government
sport
grounds and there must be other ways how
to improve public Rephrase
apply
health
. From my perspective, I do not have a concrete position. So, in this
essay
I will Add a comma
,essay
further
exemine
Correct your spelling
examine
this
thought-provoking issue.
On the one hand, our authority
has to be concerned about health
of residents . Add an article
the health
As a result
, it must do everything to reach this
aim of healthy
society. Add an article
a healthy
Firstly
, many people
do not have a lot of money which they can spend for
attending Change preposition
on
trainings
at the gym. Change the wording
training
pieces of training
Hence
, when they will
have Verb problem
apply
Correct article usage
a sport
sport
ground near their house, Change the noun form
sports
it
will be a big chance that they will decide to do Correct pronoun usage
there
sport
. In addition
, authority
has to make all Add an article
the authority
trainings
for children and teenagers under 18 free. Change the wording
training
pieces of training
For instance
, football, basketball, tennis and so on.
On the other hand
, it is a fact that just do
Wrong verb form
doing
sport
will not help you too
lose weight or improve Correct your spelling
to
for example
your digestion. Thus
, authority
have to do more apart of building Fix the agreement mistake
authorities
sport
facilities and Change the noun form
sports
sport
grounds. Change the noun form
sports
To begin
with, at schools
children should attend lessons which will teach them about Add a comma
,schools
balanced
diet and all Correct article usage
a balanced
these
stuff. Correct determiner usage
this
Furthermore
, government
should Add an article
the government
to
restrict the selling of cigarettes and alcohol. Change the verb form
apply
Moreover
, create free courses which will be
educate Unnecessary verb
apply
residence
about Replace the word
residents
health
Replace the word
healthy
lifestyle
.
In conclusion, Fix the agreement mistake
lifestyles
Add an article
the authority
authority
must be concerned about Fix the agreement mistake
authorities
health
of Add an article
the health
public
. Add an article
the public
Thus
, try to do everything which will help increase the level of healthy people
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