Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There are a lot of people

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who believes

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believes

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believe

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that

main

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the main

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environmental

problem

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is the loss of

particular

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a particular

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population

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of plants and animals.

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others argue that there any

others

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other

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environmental problems

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that is

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are

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more essential nowadays. In

this

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essay, I will discuss both

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apply

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views

between

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the

population

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endanger

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endangered

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animal

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animals

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and the bad

air

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pollution

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for human lives. A species endangered animal is the main environmental

problem

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the earth nowadays. The

population

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endanger

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endangered

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animal

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animals

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decreasing

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decreases

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over

the

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apply

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time which

is causes

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is caused

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extinct

animal

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animals

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in the future. The condition may

occur

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cause

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if their

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their

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if their

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habitat

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have

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to be

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broken for certain

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businesses

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business

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businesses

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such

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as for new mining

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areas

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area

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areas

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or new

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industries

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industry

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industries

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Such happening

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Happening

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in Kalimantan,

there

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are many

rainforest

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rainforests

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in Kalimantan as a

habitat

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for

Orang

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Utan

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. Currently, deforestation for

new

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the new

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mining sector

happened

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is happening

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in the part of Kalimantan for business purposes.

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Orang

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Utan

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get

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apply

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lose

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lost

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their

habitat

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. It

is causes

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causes

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the

population

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Orang

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Utan

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decreasing

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decrease

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over

the

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apply

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time. Maybe our next generation

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will find it

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impossible to meet

Orang

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Utan

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again in the future.

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, there is another essential environmental issue booming nowadays.

This

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problem

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is having

direct

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a direct

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impact

for

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human lives. The bad

air

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quality,

this

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issue is

being

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apply

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the main environmental

problem

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. It

was happened

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happened

has happened

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from the gas emission over

than

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apply

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the standard level

gas

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of gas

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emission set by the government. Most of the bad gas

emission

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emissions

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is coming

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come

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from vehicles, coal power generators and

also

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factory.

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happened in Jakarta nowadays, the level of

air

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pollution

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unhealthy

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an unhealthy

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category.

The bad

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Bad

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air

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pollution

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can

threat

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threaten

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human health

such

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as respiratory tract

infection

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infections

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This

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this

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situation

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has

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being serious impact

for

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all people in the city specifically

for

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older people

as well as

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babies' lives.

To conclude

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, there are many environmental problems nowadays.

Decreasing

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The decreasing

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endanger

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endangered

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animal

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animals

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will

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becoming

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become

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extinct animal in the future if the

habitat

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Orang

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Utan

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changed

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is changed

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to being new business area.

On the other hand

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, there is another environmental

problem

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have

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has

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been happening

about

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apply

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the effect

bad

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of bad

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air

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pollution

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which is being serious

problem

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for human health in the city.

haloalwan

Sep 8, 2023

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