With the rapid development of communication technology, such as smartphones, tablets, and other mobile devices, some people think the disadvantages outweigh its advantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The rapid technical
progressing
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in
communication
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field has led to the emergence of tremendous mobile facilities. With their overrunning in our daily
life
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, some
people
have raised a concern that there are more negative effects than
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positive they can bring to us, but I do not agree with
this
point.
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is no doubt that some side-effects have emerged with these
devices
widely used.
Firstly
, these newly devised electronic products have dissipated
people
's immense time, reducing their energy
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to other more important things.
For example
, many students are prone to be attracted by manifold mobile games. They may get addicted to these games without any awareness if they are not restrained
to use
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mobile facilities, which eventually affect their study. Another demerit would be the potential
damages
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that these
devices
may cause to our
body
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, like magnetic radiation and sight-hurting.
While
some risks cannot be aware by
people
when they are using these
devices
, these still deserve us paying attention to.
However
, I believe that the
widely used
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of these mobile
devices
has generated more positive influences. For one, they are playing increasingly critical roles in our daily
life
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, significantly improving the efficiency of our work and learning, saving a lot of
people
's time and energy. For another,
people
's lives are more convenient than before
due to
their usage. An obvious example is that we can contact each other at any time once we have a cell phone in our pocket. It is
hardly
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to imagine that if they
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not invented, it would take several days or weeks for us to transmit our information to others. In conclusion, the emergence of various mobile facilities may have some demerits in our life, but I prefer to be in
favor
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of more positive effects than
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negative
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.
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