The system used for rubbish/garbage collection in your local are is not working properly. This is causing problems you and your neighbours. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter •Describe how the rubbish collection system is not working properly •Explain how this is affecting you and your neighbours •Suggest what should be done about the problem
Dear Sir,
My name is Kulwinder Kaur and I am residing near Scarborough Town Centre. I am writing
this
letter to express my deep concern pertaining to the waste collection machine
in our machine
which has not working properly for the last
couple of weeks.
The problem with this
machine
was diagnosed by one of my close friends who is professionally an electrician. According to
him, the green pushing button is not working properly due to
some loose wires. Additionally
, the socket also
burnt out.
Consequently
, garbage not has been disposed of in the last
2 weeks which eventually creates a foul odour in the whole area. As a result
, Children and older are getting sick every day because it is not only adversely creating a negative impact on their health but also
inviting insects and mosquitos.
It would appreciated if the local council could arrange a technician in order to fix this
system or replace it with the new machine
on an urgent basis.
I am keenly looking forward to your response and the resolution of this
pressing issue.
Yours faithfully,
Kulwinder KaurSubmitted by kulwinder250897 on
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task response
Make sure to address all the points required in the prompt. You missed to mention about the impact on your neighbors. Also, provide more specific details regarding the issues caused by the malfunctioning waste collection machine.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate, but the coherence and cohesion of the letter could be improved with better organization of ideas and smoother transitions between sentences and paragraphs.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite