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The maps show the developments which happened between 1990 and 2005.

The maps show the developments which happened between 1990 and 2005.
#maps #show #developments
The maps show the developments which happened between 1990 and 2005. In 1990,the seaside resort was much greener in dwelling area with many
of
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trees. During 15 years,there wasn’t much difference. The most noticeable change is new buildings and
supermarket
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supermarkets
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 near
north-west
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the north-west
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. The woods on
south west
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south-west
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 were cut down.
House
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A house
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nearby
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near
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 school was knocked down. Trees and houses
on
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in
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north-east
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the north-east
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 were replaced by
factory
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factories
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. Under the railway station constructed Ferry.
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, the railway station has increased and set up under new buildings and factory on
north
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the north
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. A few trees
were chop
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were chopped
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 down
substituted
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and substituted
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 by
airport
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the airport
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. There
more
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are more
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 changes
on
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in
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the west
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west
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West
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 than
on
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in
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the east
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east
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East
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. Airport,factory and fewer houses than 15 years ago,on the east side in 2005.
While
on
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in
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west
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the west
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 much more skyscrapers,
new
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and new
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supermarket
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supermarkets
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.
Also
 railway station which divides the sea,and the new ferry.
Overall
,weighing up
of
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the two maps reveals a difference between rural seaside
resort
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resorts
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 and new seaside
resort
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resorts
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 with many facilities and more
modern
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onesmodern
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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