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Task 2 Today more people travelling than ever before. Why is this case? What are the benefits of travelling for the travellers?

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Nowadays, all over the world, many
people
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travel
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 more than before.
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 some
people
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 think the advantages of travelling more than ever before, other
people
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thinks
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 there are advantages for travellers to
travel
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 exist. From my point of view, I think both perspectives are valid for the reasons discussed below. On the one hand, as far as
people
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 travelling more than before is concerned,
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, to a large extent, especially in modern times, no matter where in the world you live, you can discover the world easily
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 the
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 that you have access to
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, resulting in the
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 that you can book easier and faster
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 as hotels, flights, visa.
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,
people
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's mentality could change through the years, leading to realizing that they need to live their lives.
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, most
people
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 in the Fifty, buy a house and work for the same company for many years,
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 of the new generation changing their minds and working for a living.
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, there are reasons for travellers who
travel
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 has many advantages. First and foremost, by and large, you can be free and open-minded, in order to visit different cultures, resulting in the
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 that you feel less stressed by work.
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, and most importantly for me, when you discover many areas, you can find and choose a new place to live,
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 the
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 that you compared with other places where you have been. In conclusion,
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 some
people
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 think that the new generation
travel
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 more than before, others say there are benefits for travellers to
travel
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. In my opinion, both perspectives have value for the above-mentioned reasons.
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