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In many countries, men and women work full-time. It is therefore logical for men and women to share household work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, many people believe that men and
women
 should share
household
chores
 equally as both genders are just as likely to have full-time jobs. Personally, I agree with
this
 viewpoint and the following paragraphs shall outline my reasons for
this
 belief. First and foremost, traditional gender roles have been severely diminished in many cultures in recent years.
This
 means that less pressure is now placed on
women
 to complete the tasks that were commonly associated
as
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 being a
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 job to complete. These days it is just as acceptable for a man to do the housework as it is for the
women
, and they won’t be looked down upon by their male friends as they might have been in the past.
Secondly
, it has become much more commonplace for
women
 to be the main breadwinners of a
household
 and
therefore
 by default have less time available for domestic duties
This
 means that it often makes more sense for men to stay at home and not work, which in turn means that they have more time available to complete
household
chores
 than might have been the case in the past. Imagine, if a woman worked full time and
then
 had to come home and complete all of the
household
chores
 as well, regardless of whether the partner was working or not, the relationship would be put under a great deal of pressure and might eventually end if they were left to do the
chores
 alone. In summary, I agree that the changing trends of society mean that couples are often led to divide
household
chores
 more equally these days. Despite resistance by certain groups,
this
 trend is likely to continue into the future.
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