Some cities have vehicle-free days, when private cars, trucks, motorcycles are banned in the city center. Public transportation like buses, taxis and metros are advised. To what extent do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

There is a growing concern about the
ocassions
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occasions
when individual types of transport are not allowed to be driven in the metropolitan area,
While
public transportation
such
as buses, taxis and metro are encouraged. In spite of having drawbacks, I believe that
this
practice can make our
life
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better. On the one hand, reducing private vehicles is more beneficial to our society.
First,
our environment would be improved thanks to the act of deterring citizens from using their own
transports
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for daily commuting.
As a result
, the amount of exhaust from vehicles is greatly reduced, which gradually improves the state of nearby citizens’ well-being.
Therefore
, the likelihood of suffering from diseases which are related to the respiratory system would be lower.
Second,
the alternative types of transportation would contribute to decreasing traffic congestion, especially during rush hours. Since people break the habit of employing their own cars, the declining number of vehicles on the street facilitates
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flows
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of traffic.
On the other hand
, despite
positive
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sides, there are some negative sides.
First,
we would no longer be able to control our own timetable as we have to depend greatly on the running schedule when we use public
transports
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. We
also
have to move to the stops and spend time waiting which is
so
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extremely inconvenient.
Second,
if everyone has options for travel by train, the trains might be overloaded with customers in rush hours.
Thus
, public
transportations
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would fail to meet the expectations of the passengers. In conclusion, vehicle free-days cause some limitations yet it is undeniable that
this
trend brings plenty of advantages. In my point of view, the quality of
transport’s
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infrastructure needs to be enhanced to satisfy
traveler’s
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demand
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.
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