The chart gives information about educational studying for both genders in three different periods regarding fulltime or part-time studying in Britain.
The chart gives information about educational studying for
both
genders in three different periods regarding fulltime
or part-time studying in Britain.
Correct your spelling
full-time
Firstly
, the number of full-time participants increased for both
genders. Male numbers starts
Wrong verb form
started
around
90 Change preposition
at around
thousands
in the Change to singular
thousand
year
1970, then
after one decade, it reached to 100 thousands
. Change to singular
thousand
While
, after two decades, it peaked rearly
200 Correct your spelling
really
early
nearly
thousands
. Change to singular
thousand
Similarly
, female students
went up, but at
Change preposition
in
the
1970, it was half Change the article
apply
male
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the male
numbers
, Fix the agreement mistake
number
then
, it reached to
200 Change preposition
apply
thousands
in the Change to singular
thousand
year
1990 like male students
.
Secondly
, female, part-time students
were dradually raised from 650 thousands
Change to singular
thousand
into
800 Change preposition
to
thousands
in the Change to singular
thousand
year
1970-1980. In the year
1990, it increadibily
went up and nearly peaked Correct your spelling
incredibly
increasingly
to
one million Change preposition
at
students
. The male part-time students
was
recorded the highest number in the Unnecessary verb
apply
year
1970 then
showed some fluctuation and it was nearly 820 thousands
in the Change to singular
thousand
last
year
1990.
Overall
, the participants for both
male
and Fix the agreement mistake
males
female
are significantly higher in part-time education than Fix the agreement mistake
females
fulltime
. The number of Correct your spelling
full-time
female
gradually increased in Change to a plural noun
females
both
types of studies, while
the male numbers was
decreased in part-time education.Unnecessary verb
apply
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