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Some people believe that eventually all jobs will be done by artificially intelligent robots. What is your opinion?

#people #jobs #robots
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In the modern era, most
of
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people
deem
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 that
robots
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 will do all kinds of
work
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 in the upcoming years. In my opinion, it is true to some extent
as
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 technology will be increased in the
future
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,
whereas
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 for automation of the
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robots
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 there will be
also
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 a need
of
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 human
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. On the one
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 individuals predict that
robots
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 will take the place of humans in the
future
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 and do their jobs because technological demands will be enhanced among the people. To make it more clear, there are many industrial areas where all type of
work
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 is operated by machines, and these technical machines
work
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 may be improved by using
robots
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 in the
future
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 as
robots
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 are the scientific gadgets who do more efficient
work
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 than the machines or even human
beings
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, so there need will increase in the modern time period.
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according to
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 a survey, in many businesses
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 as automobiles, maximum
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 is done
by
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 the help of
robots
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 and these
type
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 of
business
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businesses
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 will accelerate in the
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,
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 is why they require more
robots
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.
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, they will not completely replace
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human
beings
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 as they are
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the
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human creatures, and somewhat depend on the person to operate them correctly.
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, they cannot do creative
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as
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like humans, and
also
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 they cannot give ideas which are required in different fields to perform better. To exemplify, in various sectors like crafts making, human creativity and skills are required rather than
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robots
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. In conclusion, it is correct that
robots
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 will do more
work
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 in the
future
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 but they will not completely take the place of human
beings
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 as public demands the creativity in the things that
robots
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 lack.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • artificial intelligence (AI)
  • automation
  • robotics
  • futuristic developments
  • analyze data
  • analytical precision
  • human capabilities
  • emotional intelligence
  • human interaction
  • human oversight
  • strategic decision-making
  • nuances of human judgment
  • technological landscape
  • intrinsic human qualities
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