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Many people today find they have insufficient time to spend with their families, because of pressures of work. What problems does this create for individuals and their families? What solutions can you propose? Which would be the most effective solution, in your view?

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Nowadays, society faces a new type of problem, which is ignoring their families
due to
 the jobs they have, as numerous
folks
 decide to overwork in order to achieve a better position in their workplace or to have a higher salary.In
this
 essay, I will argue the harm of not being able to spend
time
 with your family and I will propose solutions that can solve
this
 matter.
Firstly
, today's generation of people tries to solve
this
 problem of not having enough
time
 for family by keeping a balance of
work
life
 and family
life
.
For instance
, a number of
folks
 have chosen to
work
 from home in order to have more
time
 to spend with family and
this
 way might
work
 for some people, as others can not concentrate on their
work
 from home and choose another method, which is working part-
time
.
Secondly
,
folks
 can give up their current job ,which makes them feel pressured by
work
 and choose something else that allows them to have
time
 not only for family,
however
,
also
 for their passions and hobbies.
Nevertheless
,not everybody can give up on their job.
For example
,doctors are the ones who most of the
time
 are pressured by
work
 as it is a
life
 or death matter to them and in order to have more
time
 for their families they choose to not take too many ships for the hospital and to be called only if is urgent. In conclusion,not spending enough
time
 with your family, not only causes pain for the
folks
, but,
likewise
 for the family members, especially for the children as they grow up without their parents' attention and care, as they are busy with
work
,which will lead the children to think that their parents do not care and love them and will make them self-conscious about the love they receive. I believe the best solution to
this
 matter is to choose to
work
 a part-
time
 job that allows
folks
 to keep a balance between family
life
 and
work
life
.
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