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Many people today find they have insufficient time to spend with their families, because of pressures of work. What problems does this create for individuals and their families? What solutions can you propose? Which would be the most effective solution, in your view?

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Nowadays, society faces a new type of problem, which is ignoring their families
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 the jobs they have, as numerous
folks
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 decide to overwork in order to achieve a better position in their workplace or to have a higher salary.In
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 essay, I will argue the harm of not being able to spend
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 with your family and I will propose solutions that can solve
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 matter.
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, today's generation of people tries to solve
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 problem of not having enough
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 for family by keeping a balance of
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life
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 and family
life
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.
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, a number of
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 have chosen to
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 from home in order to have more
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 to spend with family and
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 way might
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 for some people, as others can not concentrate on their
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 from home and choose another method, which is working part-
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,
folks
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 can give up their current job ,which makes them feel pressured by
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 and choose something else that allows them to have
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 not only for family,
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,
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 for their passions and hobbies.
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,not everybody can give up on their job.
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,doctors are the ones who most of the
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 are pressured by
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 as it is a
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 or death matter to them and in order to have more
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 for their families they choose to not take too many ships for the hospital and to be called only if is urgent. In conclusion,not spending enough
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 with your family, not only causes pain for the
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, but,
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 for the family members, especially for the children as they grow up without their parents' attention and care, as they are busy with
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,which will lead the children to think that their parents do not care and love them and will make them self-conscious about the love they receive. I believe the best solution to
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 matter is to choose to
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 a part-
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 job that allows
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 to keep a balance between family
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 and
work
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life
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. **Flexible working hours**: Work schedules that allow employees to vary their arrival and departure times.
  • 2. **Remote working**: Working from a location other than the traditional office, usually from home.
  • 3. **Work-life balance**: The equilibrium between personal life and career work.
  • 4. **Mental health**: A person’s condition with regard to their psychological and emotional well-being.
  • 5. **Paid family leave**: Time off work with pay granted to employees to take care of family members.
  • 6. **Time management**: The process of planning and exercising conscious control of time spent on specific activities.
  • 7. **Prioritize**: To arrange or deal with in order of importance.
  • 8. **Guilt**: A feeling of having done wrong or failed in an obligation.
  • 9. **Neglected**: Suffering a lack of proper care.
  • 10. **Behavioral issues**: Actions and mannerisms exhibited by individuals, often resulting from stress or emotional instability.
  • 11. **Support systems**: Networks of people who provide an individual with practical or emotional support.
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