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Nowadays, more and more people are moving from the countryside to cities, which are becoming overcrowded. What are the reasons for this movement to cities and what are the effects?

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The number of
people
 immigrating to
cities
 has increased currently which has made
cities
 more populated.
This
 has influenced society in many ways and there are major reasons for
this
 phenomenon. One of the most significant causes that more
people
 are eager to move to urban
areas
 is numerous job opportunities. There are many job vacancies offered in a city that enable
people
 to pick one of them in accordance with their needs and desires.
Due to
 living in villages, the youth had no other choices other than working on farmlands.
Moreover
, the lack of recreational
areas
 and comprehensive healthcare systems in the countryside has attracted a great population to large
cities
. It is a fact that many villagers are deprived of an efficient number of nurses and doctors and have to travel to
cities
 to find appropriate treatments. Moving to
cities
 has affected the
areas
 in many aspects including culture and population. The more
people
 living in an area, the more probable it is to become overcrowded. In Italy, the number of residents has decreased as the youth decided to replace their residential
areas
 with larger
cities
.
In addition
, what is quite noticeable is that the differences in culture are hard to deal and it might take much time to get used to the new environment. Sometimes newcomers do not observe ethics and the rules of living in a cosmopolitan.
That is
 why old inhabitants find newcomers' behaviours quite frustrating. These two factors may negatively affect megacities. In conclusion, In spite of the existence of various facilities and higher employment rates in
cities
, effective measures should be taken into account to prevent the population of small places from moving to
cities
 to avoid cultural conflicts and being crowded.
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