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Some people think it is important to keep and maintain old buildings rather than replacing them with mode buildings. To at extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, it is common to think that brand-new things, including
buildings
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, are always much better than the old ones.
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, a lot of people disagree with
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 statement and stand for protecting and maintaining historical landmarks. And I am
one
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 of those. First of all, why
we
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 have to create something new,
modern
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 if the old and used
one
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 works perfectly fine
.
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 Many historical
buildings
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 are mostly in
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mint condition and they require only a bit of make-up to reborn their past beauty.
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, most of the houses in
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 of my
city
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, Kaliningrad, district are original ones. These houses were not damaged during
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WW2
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 allowed
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 repair them after. Now these builds are still in use as apartment ones just like it was 90 years ago.
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, renovating and restoring
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old
buildings
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help
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 to save money and use
them
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it
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 for funding other essential constructions
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 as schools, hospitals and so on.
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, it is crucial for some Russian cities like Saint Petersburg to build new schools
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 a great number of children starting their studies in the next few years.
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,
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more careful and deliberate funding will allow
government
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 to solve these issues.
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 but not least, maintaining
connection
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a connection
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 between
past
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the past
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 and
future
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the future
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 is consequential for
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society as we all use our previous
experience
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experiences
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 for learning. And the old architecture is
one
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 of the pieces to help us to do so as every building carries
history
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 in it. Preserving historical
buildings
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 plays a big role in giving people an opportunity to learn
history
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 not only by looking at the photos in books but
also
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 by seeing these captured
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history
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 pieces in reality.
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, it is definitely important and necessary to preserve and protect the old builds
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 to replace them from scratch with modern designs, both as
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part of our
history
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 and a good saving resource.
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