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Some people think that the government should subsidise fruit and vegetables to make healthy food more affordable. Others argue that the government should tax unhealthy food instead. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Obesity has become a major health concern these days. It can be argued that making healthier options readily available to the public can alleviate the problem. Even though
this
 approach might work, I believe that making unhealthy
foods
 scarcer in society is
also
 necessary to tackle
this
 effectively.
Firstly
, why is outside
food
 always unhealthy? Starting from my school cafeteria and college canteen to street
food
 and fast-
food
 enterprises, they always tend to promote taste and short-term indulgences.
As a result
, more and more people, with a lack of a better option, tend to binge on these
foods
, leading to a number of health concerns like fatty liver, heart disease, stroke etc. all of which stem from the basic problem i.e. obesity. Taxing these
foods
,
therefore
 is essential if the government is aiming for a healthier society.
Also
, these
foods
 can be made scarcer by decreasing the
fast-
Correct quantifier usage
number of fast-food
show examples
food
 franchises in the country.
On the other hand
, providing humans with what is essential is
also
 important. Apart from fruits and vegetables sold at cheaper prices, healthier fast
food
 stalls can be encouraged. Being from India, the commonly available street
food
 here is called ‘chat’ which is a mixture of a variety of pulses, vegetables and spices. By doing
this
, people can motivate each other to eat better.
This
 approach can encourage people to aim for a fitter lifestyle if healthy
food
 is presented everywhere. In conclusion, I believe that a balanced approach is needed which promotes healthier
foods
 and discourages unhealthy ones, to win over
this
 situation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • subsidise
  • affordable
  • public health
  • healthcare costs
  • diet-related illnesses
  • agricultural sector
  • taxing
  • discourages
  • consumption
  • funds
  • redirected
  • health programs
  • educational campaigns
  • balanced approach
  • comprehensive solution
  • financial deterrent
  • societal shift
  • eating habits
  • effective
  • drawbacks
  • economic impact
  • low-income individuals
  • consumer behavior
  • administrative feasibility
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