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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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With advances in
driverless
 technologies and personal income rise,
driverless
 vehicles are widely used.
This
 modern trend brings benefits and causes problems to public and personal
wellbeing
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 as well. From my perspective, it has more advantages than disadvantages for individuals and
a
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society. First off, autonomous
cars
 provide
safer
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 driving experience for individuals because of
its
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 accurate and precise calculation, it is more likely to reduce the possibility of car crashes and
the
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casualty since
it
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 can help avoid fatigue and drunk
drive
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.
Besides
, greater convenience will be beneficial to those who are under-qualified,
such
 as the disabled, junior and senior, and greater assistance to drive
cars
 will be offered without bothering others.
Additionally
, the
widely
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 use of self-driving
cars
 can slash
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the cost of
government
 expenditure and
labor
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cost
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 so that the governors can prioritize
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to
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other crucial concerns,
such
 as poverty reduction, education and road development - thanks to
this
 technology,
these
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is
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 no need for
government
 to employ human drivers for the public transports
such
 as public bus, subway or tram. It is true that the disadvantages of autonomous
cars
 should be taken into consideration as
this
 technology still
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 much improvement and human drivers cannot be completely replaced by
driverless
 technology.
However
, these problems can be dealt
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 long as the
government
government
 take effective measures to limit the overuse of the abuse of self-driving technologies
as well as
 do more road-testing on various spots to enhance safety. In conclusion, when weighing in pros and cons, I still reaffirm my view that the use of
driverless
 technologies does more good than harm to individuals and
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society.
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 is because the merits
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 them can be improved through adopting certain new regulations or rules.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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