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the graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. summarize the information and make a comparison.

the graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. summarize the information and make a comparison.
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This
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 line chart depicts the number of people had visited
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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island
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islands
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 from 2010 to 2017 by millions. It is clear from the graph that the people choose to stay on the cruise for a long time.
According to
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 what is shown, the total of visitors in the
firts
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first
 year
is
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was
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 one
million
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 people and
this
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 number started to grow to over 2.5
million
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 in 2015 and remained level until 2016
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 increased to 3.5
million
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at the end
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 of the period. In terms of who stayed on the
island
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 and on the ships, there were 300 thousand stayed on the ships
while
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 about who stayed on the
island
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 around 700 thousand in 2010. The number increased for these steayed on the
island
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 to 1.5
million
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 in 2013
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 remained steady from 2013 to 2017.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 4 times.
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