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Most people prefer ready to eat food outside of their home rather than homemade food nowadays. Do you think this has more advantages or disadvantages?

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Nowadays many
indivisuals
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individuals
favor
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to eat
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eating
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 outside
instead
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 of cooking and eating in their own houses. There are advantages and disadvantages and
i
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 am going to discuss both views in
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 essay and give my own opinion. Eating
food
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 outside has two main benefits.
Firstly
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, it is faster than cooking in the house and they can eat and get ready for the rest of the day in
the
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less time,
they
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also
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 will not get tired
while
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 cooking their own
food
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. There are many
people
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, who prefer to eat in a restaurant.
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example
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, busy
people
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 usually prefer to have their
food
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 in a bistro to have more time for doing the rest of their work. Another advantage of eating outside
,
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 is that the
restaurants
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restaurant's
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foods
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 are
realy
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really
 delicious and
indivisuals
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individuals
individual
 enjoy their
food
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 better.
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, a
chef maid
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chef-made
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 pizza is more delicious than a handmade one. In my opinion, eating outside has more disadvantages than advantages. It is obvious that street
foods
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 are not as healthy as homemade
foods
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, because the restaurants usually do not care about their
customers
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customer's
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 health issues.
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, they use bad raw materials and the meals are greasy.
On the other hand
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, the
buffets
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foods
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 are
realy
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really
 expensive and it is cheaper to buy raw materials and
cook
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 in the house.
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example
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 they may be able to
cook
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hamburgur
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hamburger
hamburgers
 in their homes
with
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at
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 half of the restaurant price and
people
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 who
cook
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 in their houses have more capability to save their money and spend it in better ways. In conclusion, it is more
economic
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 and healthy for
people
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 to
cook
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 and eat in their own properties and use the cafe and restaurant places, just to
hangout
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hang out
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 with their friends on the weekends.

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