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The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession

The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession
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The bar chart offers information about the salary comparisons of various jobs in the U.K., and units were measured in
pounds
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.
While
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 the table displays the average working
hours
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 weekly for every profession. In terms of the bar chart, the salaries of underground drivers whether in the beginning (5000
pounds
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) or three years later (5100
pounds
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) show the best performance among the four different jobs.
By contrast
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, the money earned by nurses is the lowest in the given periods, with 1800
pounds
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 and 1900
pounds
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 respectively. Others, it is apparent that the salaries for firefighters are nearly twice that police obtain whether at the beginning working year or after three years. Turning to the table, Underground drivers have the highest salaries, but do less time weekly, with 36
hours
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.
However
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, nurses receive the lowest money
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 and work fewer average
hours
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 per week (38
hours
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). Interestingly, the average working
hours
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 for firefighters with the most time (55
hours
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) is still higher than that for police.
To sum up
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, we can see from the given charts that the firefighter has higher money paid in both periods and the highest average working
hours
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 weekly.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pounds, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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