the best way to solve the world's environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is an idea that the best
way
to figure out adverse environmental impacts is to increase the cost of
fuel
for cars and other vehicles. In my view, I claimed that there are a bundle of solutions that can
makeout
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that problem thoroughly,
i
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therefore
disagree with the statement that raising the
price
of
fuel
is the best
way
to reduce damage to
environment
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. The rise in
cost
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of
fuel
make
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a decline
on
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the use of vehicles, but the cons dominate its pros.
To begin
with,
fuel
links mightily with the economy of a country. Oil and gas
affects
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almost things, from
the
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consumer spending to the
price
of good, if we cannot control it ideally, we can struggle in an economic depression, which leads to
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drop in
nation’s
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value,
increase
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the
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unemployment rate, and
also
put
a
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stress on financial management in every household, mainly be the reason that
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criminal rate. Dubai set a perfect example for
this
issue, when the oil
price
there rocketed in
a
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long term, the society spread into two sides: slums and skyscrapers right next to each other,
while
the quality of life between both was drastically divided like chalk and cheese.
While
we are exploring more about the effects between prices and
dissels
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diesels
dispels
, agree that rising
in
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oil prices do not always lead to depression;
however
, there is a spotlight that the improvement of engine day by day
are
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also
reducing environmental contamination gradually.
That is
one of the best
way
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to wipe out nature, or world pollution,
according to
me. For centuries, doctors in many fields worked on different kinds of projects to find out about new types of engines or new sources of energy. As an undeniable example
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this
, trains in the beginning
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by
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coal, and years later,
at
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now, we use electricity
instead
. In conclusion,
while
increasing the
price
of fossil fuels can acceptably be a
way
to reduce stress on nature, I do not believe that it outweighs the other
way
out.
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