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Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 150 words

Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 150 words
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The map shows, the area of Brandfield where
city
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 planners have finalized to construction of a shopping mall in the proposed sites S1 and S2. To summarize, the new shopping wall was built in the approached area in the
city
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 of Brandfield. The Brandfield have a huge surrounding, The
City
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centre
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 was constructed in the middle of the
city
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, and it was easily accessible as it has road and railway facilities from NorthEast to SouthEast and NorthWest and SouthEast respectively.
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, from the
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centre
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, the public transport on the highway used to travel near the Golf course and park,
then
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 the same way to travel to the Housing Estate. Though
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 the
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centre
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 is located hot of the
city
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, it was constructed in the middle of the river,
therefore
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 river water flows from SouthWest to NorthEast.
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, an industrial estate located near the road
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 railway facilities in the SouthEast corner of the
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centre
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • residential area
  • industrial zone
  • city center
  • main road
  • benefits
  • convenience
  • traffic congestion
  • accessibility
  • workers
  • compare
  • differences
  • pros and cons
  • suitable
  • analysis
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