Some people believe that teenagers should always follow the example of the older people. Others believe that teenagers should question what older people say. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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have to ask a lot of questions about what elderly people say. In

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now,

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use his theory at schools and they don't judge

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, so they know that hole the information is correct.

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believe that young nations should investigate

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data are higher than

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, their attitude has changed.

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data without investigating. In conclusion,

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the elderly person's experience and knowledge is so valuable like science, but about other issues like

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they tend to invest and

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may accept their ideas. In that

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to find their own

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without attention to

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person's attitude.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

303 words

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Some people believe that teenagers should always follow the example of the older people. Others believe that teenagers should question what older people say. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Sources of electrocity in four countries 2003-2008

In the past, people stored knowledge in books. Nowadays, people store knowledge on the internet. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctors. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?