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Not enough students around the world choose to study science subjects at university. What are the reasons for this? What impact does this issue have on society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The world of
science
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 needs more people, especially a younger generation
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 can think differently. Children across the globe are opting out of
science
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 at schools.
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may be
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 because of a number of reasons which will be discussed in
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along with
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 its effects on the general public.
To begin
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 with,
science
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 is comparatively challenging. Because of
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, students are scared to choose the field. In my school, not a lot of my friends chose the
hard-sciences
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hard sciences
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 as the textbooks were too dry and complicated.
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, people tend to think about future job opportunities, the money
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they
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makes
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 and most importantly, the time it takes to settle down in life. In my country,
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, there is a dearth of work for
engineer
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 graduates and they are forced to go for higher studies to improve their skills, with
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the
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 hope
to land
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of landing
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 a decent job someday.
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 is leading to longer study times which translates to settling later in life. Taking all
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 into consideration, today’s generation is leaning more towards easier routes.
As a result
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 of
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, the future generation is going to bear the brunt of it. Scientific discoveries will decrease, which will slow down the progress of mankind. The number of doctors will fall, leading to pressure on the existing ones, which in turn will affect the healthcare system.
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, government hospitals serve the poor and needy free of cost, which, for obvious reasons attracts a lot of patients leading to raised workloads.
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 can be avoided if more students
joined
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 the medical fraternity.
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, large multinational companies won’t be headed by worthy professionals, all of which will tire out a
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 economy.
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, children must be encouraged from middle school to take up
science
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 and universities must be properly funded with good teaching faculty in order for
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humanity to achieve great heights.

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