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Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing skill is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#university #education #job #hand #people #skill
Some people argue that
university
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a university
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education
 is an essential part of getting an appropriate
job
,
while
 it has been stated that gaining significant
skills
 and
experiences
 would be more beneficial than
academic
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an academic
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education
.
Although
 having more
experiences
 and special
skills
affect
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affects
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on
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apply
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the
job
 opportunities we might get, I am of the opinion that
university
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a university
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education
 is more important in the case of getting a good occupation. On one hand, some think that hands-on
experiences
 are more critical than academic ones. Some developing countries have faced
the
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a
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 lack of high-skilled workers. In these countries, the state authorities think about their own benefits and because of that they are looking for some labour forces who
not
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do not
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 have enough
education
 to work in private companies or have their own start-ups. In these situations, the payment that they will request would be
the
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apply
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less than others.
Additionally
, there are numerous occupations which care more about
skills
 than
adacemic
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academic
educations
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education
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.
For instance
, being a make-up artist
do
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does
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 not require
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a high-level
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high-level
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high level
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 of
education
.
On the other hand
, the high level of literacy rate is vital for our modern and technological communication. These days, even a simple worker should know how to read,write and do some mathematical calculations.
Furthermore
, all
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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societies need
high-qualifies
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highly qualified
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 doctors, surgeons and engineers. If
the
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apply
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societies
wanted
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want
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 to stay
in
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at
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 the top of the
copetition
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competition
 with other communications, they should encourage
the
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apply
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individuals ,who have the abilities,
intersts
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interests
 and desires,
continuing
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to continue
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 their professional
edducation
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education
. In my opinion, good levels of
education
 would broaden our horizons and provide us
more
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with more
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job
oppotunities
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opportunities
. In
conc;usion
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conclusion
, getting
skills
 and
experiences
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experience
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 can be an effective property
fo
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for
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 getting a good
job
 , especially in developing and industrial areas.
Although
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However
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, I personally think that
university
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a university
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education
 can put more opportunities
on
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apply
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our way, which is a safer approach
for
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to
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 being successful in our competitive world.
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