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Should Long term job-seekers in receipt of government benefits be made to do voluntary work so that they give something back to the community

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Working-class are the backbone of every nation. The
people
 collecting welfare
while
 searching for a job for a longer period of time should be made to do charity
work
 for the betterment of
society
 and individuals. The essay will explore
this
 belief in detail.
People
 who do not have jobs become a burden on the country as they consume monetary resources in the form of welfare, funds which could be used in the development of public institutions and infrastructure like schools, hospitals, roads and many more.
Similarly
, unemployed individuals do not contribute to taxes which in turn weakens the government treasury which
as a result
 slows down the growth of
society
 and puts stress on hard-working, tax-paying
people
 leading them towards mental and financial problems. A person who stays out of
work
 for too long can lose their confidence and their skill set can deplete over time, Doing charity
work
 like construction and trade jobs can help them learn a new ability or sharpen them,
thus
, building back their confidence and expertise to return to
work
.
In addition
 to
this
 free
work
 can
also
 help them make connections with potential employers, which can allow them to secure a job, putting them back on their feet.
To conclude
 it can be said that taking
people
 out of
work
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 workforce can have detrimental effects on both individuals and
society
,
on the other hand
, charity
work
 can make
people
 eligible, and confident to get and keep jobs . It is mutually beneficial for both
society
 and the individual.
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