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in many countries, people are now living longer than ever befor. some people say an ageing population creats problems for governments. other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. to what extent do the advantages of having an ageing populaion outweigh thr disadvantages?

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In many countries, the population of elder
people
 is more than before. Some
people
 claim that it creates problems for governments but other
people
against
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 that opinion and argue that
are
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is
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 beneficial for our society. Some
people
 say that
ageing
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the ageing
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 population can cause problems. Because
,
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 elders are so old and they need a lot of attention. Not only can they be sick very soon , but
also
 it is necessary for them to have
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private nurse to look after them and be available
in
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every
hours
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a
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 day.
Although
 they have been paying
tax
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 for many years,
but
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it
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 a lot for the government in their
last
 years of life.
On the other hand
, some
people
 think that older
people
also
 have benefits.
Furthermore
, they are the
one
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 who have a lot of experience in their job, society and so on. So, they can be a wonderful tutor for the
youngesters
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youngsters
 in
the
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society. They can advise their grandchild
to
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on
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 how to communicate or how to perform and act in job interviews. Meanwhile, they can be employed in the companies to control the new
employees
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employees'
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 work,
for instance
. In conclusion, the growth of
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the elder
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elder
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elderly
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 population
have
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 both advantages and disadvantages. They are likely to have health problems and the need
of
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for
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 constant help for living and
also
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they are experienced enough to advise
people
 and
guid
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guide
them to the correct line of the life road.
Moreover
, they can be a good source of inspiration for young
people
 during their lifespan.
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