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Some people believe that the advent of economical air travel has been very beneficial by making international travel more accessible, while others argue that it has had a very negative impact. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

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Economical
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 has become the preferred mode of international
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 for many people today. It offers time efficiency and convenience, allowing
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 to reach their destinations quickly and without hassles.
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, there is an ongoing debate about the merits and drawbacks of
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. In my view, individuals should carefully consider the negative consequences before choosing to fly.
This
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air
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travel
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. First and foremost,
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 significantly reduces
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 time when moving between different locations. To illustrate,
airplanes
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 require fewer hours to reach a destination compared to other modes of transportation,
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 as trains, ships, or subways.
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, the availability of single-trip flights from most airlines makes it more accessible for individuals to
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 worldwide, eliminating many inconveniences associated with alternative forms of transportation. Despite the convenience that economical
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 offers, I believe there are numerous negative impacts that warrant discussion.
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,
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 contributes to environmental degradation and gives rise to various natural dilemmas,
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 as climate change and
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 pollution.
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, the burning of aviation fuel releases a substantial amount of greenhouse gases into the atmosphere, exacerbating climate change.
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 can lead to severe natural disasters, including flooding, thunderstorms, and heavy rainfall. I concur that
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 should undoubtedly consider these consequences when making their
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 choices. In conclusion,
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 I acknowledge the convenience and accessibility of
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due to
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 its cost-effectiveness and time efficiency, I
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 recognize the significant negative impacts it poses, especially on the environment.
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, individuals should take greater responsibility for our shared environment and make efforts to minimize
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 pollution as part of their civic duty.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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