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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people reach this?

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More and more individuals are interested in pursuing to discover the
history
 of
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buildings
 they
currrently
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currently
 live in among the myriad of countries. Some
reasons
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 to be articulated and investigated to
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rudimentary
 of
reasons
. There are several potential
reasons
may
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people's
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interests
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interest
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seeking
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 the
history
 of
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the buidling
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buidling
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building
 they live in.
Firstly
,
arising
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 interest
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history
 stems primarily from basic
fimilarity
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familiarity
 with local
history
.
Additionally
, when people have got the
education
 relating to the local
culture
, the basic
learing
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learning
 of local
history
 could
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 a sense of common and recognition.
Secondly
, with the development of living conditions, it can
contributes
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us
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 pursuing the quality of we are living currently. Historical and cultural heritage inevitably exists in the old buildings because they have been protected and revised
in
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such
 a long period. Meanwhile, when we are living in a qualified environment, houses have either
the
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historical and cultural heritage or modern
characteristic
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characteristics
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. There are myriad
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 and potential solutions
on
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arising
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raising
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the
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attention
on
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 the houses'
history
 they live in. The first implement is emphasizing and operating local
history
education
 for local
residents
 because it can contribute
local
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residents
arising
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a sense of recognition of local
culture
. To be more
specifically
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,
the
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local historical
education
 is not merited to take
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 of local construction obliviously.
Moreover
 in another perspective, the local government is supposed to construct and update some infrastructures,
such
 as
education
, landmarks,
historical
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 buildings. At the same time, some museums are supposed to build and let the local
residents
 have s
rudimentry
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rudimentary
 learning on it. To summarize, I have
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purveyed
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potenrial
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potential
reasons
 to explain why some people are interested in seeking the
history
 of
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the buidling
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buidling
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building
 they live in.
Additionally
, I supplied some potential implements, which could induce local
residents
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interests
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interest
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 in their own residence
culture
 and local houses'
culture
.
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