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The chart gives information about Someland's main exports in 2005, 2015 , and future projectios for 2025

The chart gives information about Someland's main exports in 2005, 2015 , and future projectios for 2025
#information #someland #exports #future #projectios
The bar chart shows the data about
someland's
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Someland's
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 main
exports
 of Meat
products
, Dairy
Products
 and International tourism in the
year
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years
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 2005, 2015 and expected projections in 2025.
Unit
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 of measurement is USD billion.
Overall
, it is observed that
the
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milk
products
exports
 and
the
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global tourism
exports
 increased from 2005 to 2015 but only the latter is predicted to increase in future
however
 the animal
products
 export
had
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decreased in the given time period and
estimated
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is estimated
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 to decrease
further
.
To begin
 with, Flesh item
exports
 had reduced from 4 to around 3.5 billion and its
predictions
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prediction
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 in the next decade is to
further
 decline to a figure of 2. The milk items export rate
at
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 2015 was almost 8 billion which is double the rate
at
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 the decade before when it was approximately
around
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4.5 to 5. World tourism
had
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 shown an increasing trend for the period considered and
expected
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is expected
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 to showcase the same fashion in the next decade as well.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words exports, products with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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