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Spending time in another country, not as a part of a holiday, is beneficial for one's personal development. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Provide reasons and examples to support your answer.

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We are living in a world of technological progress in all dimensions.
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, people are spending
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 abroad from their motherland as workers or students. For many people, including myself,
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 is beneficial for one's personal development. Above I am going to support my opinion on that point.
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, spending
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 as a worker or a foreign student, you come closer and learn the culture of other countries. That makes you open-minded and gives you the opportunity to copy and transfer into your homeland new thoughts, new themes even new cultures.
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, a Greek student at an American University can learn new techniques of learning, of living and by the
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 he returns to his country, he will have the opportunity to pass all of his new knowledge on to the members of his community.
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, with his contribution to the university faculty, students from other countries learn about the culture of Greece.
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, the aim of living alone in a strange environment, far away from your family, makes you stronger as a person. You have to find a way to succeed alone. Even if you are too shy, or embarrassed, you push yourself to make things for surviving. I remember when I was a freshman, I used to stay alone because I didn't know anyone. After six months I recognised that
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 couldn't continue, and day after day I got close to other students, so as to have company. Good friendships build these years and I am glad I did it.
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, in conclusion, I want to ensure that only good things can occur to someone's development when is needed to spend
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 in another country not as a part of a holiday. So we all have to become open-minded and lead ourselves to fall down and find a way to stand up again.
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