A country should spend money on skills training or vocational training for practical work, rather than on university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays
people believe that vocational
schools
should be prioritized
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universities when it comes to
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funds. I agree with the statement
due to
several reasons which I would like to enlist below. It is
generaly
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generally
known, that theory is undeniably necessary for a future professional, as it builds a fundamental understanding of occupational
pecularities
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peculiarities
. Continuously, gaining
notion
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related to a specific field, or even several interrelated fields, leads to an
overall
imrovement
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improvement
as a competent specialist.
Nevertheless
, the knowledge separate from
practice
is nothing more than just a theory that would hardly fit into
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working process. Educational systems of many developing countries underestimate
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of vocational
schools
, which leads to
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of a whole generation of incompetent specialists and unemployment. To continue
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,
practice
is
also
important
due to
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to try
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of trying
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new
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profession
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yourself. It is usually at
this
stage of education, students decide
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whether
they enjoy specialisation or not. In case they find themselves far from being happy with their future job, it is in their competence to switch faculty.
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of
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number of vocational
schools
can cause uncertainty and
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unability
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inability
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identification
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of students of themselves in
labour
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market. To picture it vividly,
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myself
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going
to
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4th year of
the
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bachelor and I am still not sure
wheather
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whether
I want to become a teacher or
wheather
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whether
I am good enough to lay my hand on education,
due to
lack of proper
practice
. To sum everything up, I believe that vocational
schools
are worth
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concentrated attention
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thus
is
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not supposed to be underestimated
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to universities.
Practice
is
essential
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an essential
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part of
educational
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the educational
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process, which helps to gain skills and apply them
on
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real cases,
furthermore
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only
practice
enables students to choose their future occupation properly.
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