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The diagram below gives information about the recycling of glass and plastic containers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below gives information about the recycling of glass and plastic containers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram compares the stages of recycling between
plastic
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 and
glass
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.
Overall
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, it is evident that both of them go through 8 stages beginning with collection and ending with new products.
To begin
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, there are some similarities in the process of
glass
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 and
plastic
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. Starting with the first two steps of collection and transporting to
recycling
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a recycling
the recycling
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 centre, transporting
trucks
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truck
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 collection takes five to ten days
while
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 it takes 3 to 8 weeks for time usage, both go through a washing step, and in the reshaping and melting stage both
done
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are done
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 by different machines.
On the other hand
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, there are several differences, the process of
plastic
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 is much longer and takes more time to recycle than
glass
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.
However
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, the reshaping and melting steps in
glass
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 are done by two separate machines
while
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 in
plastic
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 done by the same machine,
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then
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Then
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 in the stage of sorting,
glass
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 is sorted out by color
while
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 in
plastic
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 is sorted out by thickness and quality.
In addition
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,
in
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apply
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plastic
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it
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apply
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is usually shredded compared to
glass
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 it is crushed.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words plastic, glass with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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