Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
Some may think that it is important to encourage
children
to compete in life
while
others highlight the necessity of teaching how to cooperate with each other to become more responsible grown-ups. Although
competition builds motivation to work
hard in life
, I believe that collaboration builds more important life
skills
to perform better in life
as a responsible human.
On the one hand, encouraging children
to battle with peers helps them to be motivated and work
hard to achieve their goals. When evaluating other's performances, we may understand how behind we are at gaining life
targets. It boosts us to perform tasks enthusiastically to succeed in our targets. For instance
, a demotivated child who failed his exams could be encouraged to perform better next time by showing the best results of his peers. However
, I don't believe it is a better way to motivate children
as it may put youngsters under unnecessary pressure and they may end up being stressed, frustrated, and selfish.
On the other hand
, adolescents who have been taught to cooperate with surrounding people would get numerous opportunities to uplift their life
skills
through collaboration and teamwork. They will learn to compromise, listen, and behave politely in society while
practicing
empathy, kindness, and humanity which are crucial to becoming a responsible citizen in the future. Change the spelling
practising
For instance
, a child who has known the value of collaboration since childhood could work
better in any social group rather than a competitive individual as he is aware of many social skills
. Therefore
,I agree with the idea of exposing children
to work
together rather than being competitive to make a more socially responsible person.
In conclusion, although
encouraging children
to work
or perform better than others may motivate them to achieve their life
goals, that can make children
stressed and selfish. Therefore
teaching children
to work
as a team would be more beneficial as it uplifts many life
skills
of youngsters which are useful as adults in future.Submitted by nir.paba6 on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite