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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Sunnarise the information by selecting and reporting the main fertures, and make conparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Sunnarise the information by selecting and reporting the main fertures, and make conparisons where relevant.
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The provided bar chart illustrates data on the amount of
money
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 which
families
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 spent on different kinds of activities on a weekly basis in a specific area in the years 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
families
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 spent most of their
money
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 on
food
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 in 1968 compared to leisure in 2018.
Furthermore
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, the most significant difference in expenditure between the two years was on
food
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.
To begin
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 with,
families
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 spent the biggest amount of their weekly income on
food
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 in 1968 , with 35%,
while
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 the least
money
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 was spent on fuel and power, with a mere 7%.
Additionally
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 , the expenditure
such
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 as household goods, personal goods, transport and leisure were approximately the same in 1968.
On the contrary
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, it was evident that
families
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 spent most of their weekly income on leisure, with nearly 23%,
while
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 the least amount of
money
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 was spent on fuel and power and personal goods, both around 8%. Another prominent change was that the spending on
food
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 decreased dramatically during the period, from 35% in 1968 to only 17% in 2018.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, families, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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