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Do you agree with the following statement? Good teachers are more important to a child's development than good parents. Use specific details to support your argument.

#teachers #child #development #parents #support #argument
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 for kids and
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teenagers
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because
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emotional
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 is evident that more than them teachers play an important role in the evolution of kids just
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 usually spend the most part of their young life at school. A teacher is not only a person from whom students learn how to write,
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read, to analyze, he can be
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 a mentor, a guide for their future. A good teacher is able not only to teach, but
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 the knowledge in general, to open their minds to
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different
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 skills of a young person,
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encouraging
 him to follow the right path.
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 a good professor can individuate
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 strategies could be useful to a student in case of learning difficulties. In
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 I completely agree with the suggested statement.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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