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The international community must act immediately to ensure that all countries reduce their consumption of fossil fuels such as gas, oil, and coal. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your own opinion.

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The given table illustrates a statistic about
members
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members'
member's
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 satisfaction
from
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with
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club’s
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the club’s
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 activities, facilities and opening hours.
Overall
, the proportion of satisfaction
in
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with
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 opening hours and club facilities among
women
 was more than
men
,
while
men
 were satisfied with
range
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the range
a range
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 of activities more than
women
. With
regards
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regard
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 to the range of activities, the percentage of
women
 in
three
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the three
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 categories
were
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was
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 about 30%.
However
, most of the
men
 were very satisfied (55%) and 40% of them were satisfied,
while
 only 5% were dissatisfied.
About
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Regarding
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 club facilities, both
men
 and
women
 were very satisfied roughly 65% and the percentage of
women
 and
men
 who were dissatisfied were 14% and 10%, respectively. It can be seen,
the
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that the
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 proportion of high satisfaction of female members in opening hours was in the maximum level in
this
 survey and stood at 72%,
while
 that of
men
 in
this
 subject was 44%
also
, 25% of
woman
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women
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 was satisfied and only 3% was dissatisfied.
However
, the figure for
men
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men's
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 dissatisfaction was 37% and 19% of them
was
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were
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 satisfied.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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