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In the future, nobody wiil buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. to waht extent do you agree or disagree?

#future #nobody #wiil #newspapers #books #waht
With the advent of
technology
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 our lifestyle has dramatically changed. Nowadays, reading
books
 online is regarded as a beneficial action. It is often claimed that reading magazines and
news
 via
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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 without purchasing them has some benefits.
While
 buying
the
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books
 and magazines is an important action in my opinion reading them online can be more beneficial.
To begin
 with, technology has a vital role in our lives. Task accomplishments
has
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 accelerated. Following the
news
 and reading magazines online can have a
lot
 of practicalities. It is cost-effective and time-effective.
For
example
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 in the past purchasing the newspaper was expensive and
time consuming
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time-consuming
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. And it took a
lot
 of time to spend on going to the newsstand. But nowadays just by surfing the
news
channel
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,channel
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 you can follow up the
news
.
Moreover
, by reading
the
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books
 without printing them we can help the
enviroment
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environment
. Many
enviromental
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environmental
 activists combat cutting
the
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trees and deforestation. By taking advantage of the internet we can save the planet and control the usage of
papers
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paper
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. A
lot
 of measures should be taken to protect the
envirment
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environment
 and reading the
news
 online can be one of them.
For instance
, in the past ten
years
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 there
was
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has been
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 a decrease in deforestation
due to
 the
internet
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Internet
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.
However
, publishing
the
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books
 and printing them can
brng
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bring
 about many merits.
Such
 as turning the pages,
not
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and not
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lookign
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looking
 at the monitor
that it
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which
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 can hurt our eyes. Publishing the
books
and
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help
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helps
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 the industry and
help
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helps
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 the publishers
and
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increase their sales and revenue. Despite
this
 , I still believe that reading
the
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books
 online is more beneficial and practical. By way of conclusion,it appears to me not purchasing
the
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books
 and downloading them online has a
lot
 of
advtanages
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advantages
.
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