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With recent development in technology like e-books, some people feel that printed media like books, newspapers and magazines will soon be a thing of the past. Others feel that these forms of media will never disappear. What is your opinion?

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There is no denying the fact that the impact of technology is big enough to change a lot in our lives,
While
 it is a commonly held belief that old media will vanish because of technology, there is
also
 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that e-books in the future will be more popular than printed media.
To begin
 with, young individuals are used to being on screen a lot of their time,
In other words
, because of it they will like e-books more than printed media.
In addition
, It has easy access and reach in any place they can use it,
For example
, a remote place like a forest. Another point to consider is the west will be less because there is not a lot of paper , It is
also
 possible to say that, so it helps to make the earth
last
 longer.
Moreover
, it will be good for the environment because the trees will remain.
For instance
, The forest will
last
 longer because there will not be more cutting of tree In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe that e-books will have a good impact and effect on earth because the tree will remain, I suggest the government make a law on the use of recycled paper for any new books, newspapers and magazines.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recent development
  • e-books
  • printed media
  • thing of the past
  • convenience
  • accessibility
  • tangible
  • tactile
  • save trees
  • reduce waste
  • nostalgia
  • sentimental value
  • eye strain
  • screen fatigue
  • authentic
  • aesthetic appeal
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