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The table below shows how many people (in millions) used different forms of public transport in MIlan from 2010 to 2014

The table below shows how many people (in millions) used different forms of public transport in MIlan from 2010 to 2014
The table depicts the information regarding the number of passengers who used trains, buses, trams,taxis and the
metro
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 in Milan between 2010 and 2014.
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, the highest number of people used the
metro
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 for their travel
while
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 the reverse trend was seen in taxis in all the
years
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 from 2010 to 2014.
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 with, in the initial
years
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 of the period considered, there were 1.4
million
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 humans who used rail transport.
It is clear that
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 there was a gradual increase in the count in all the upcoming
years
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 till 2013, followed by a steep inclination in 2014 to 3.6
million
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. Moving
further
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, the usage of rental cars and trams in 2010 was 1.3 and 0.6
million
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 respectively. In the subsequent
years
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, more individuals started using these modes of transportation to reach 1
million
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 for taxis and 2.2
million
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 for trams. It is evident that
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 there was an increase in the mankind using
metro
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 in 2011 from the previous
years
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whereas
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 a decrease in the count is seen in road transportation mode. In all the following
years
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 considered, both the buses and the
metro
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 had an increase till 2014 to reach 2.4
million
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 for the former and 5
million
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 for the latter.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words metro, years, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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