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The table provides information about the projected costings for sustainable forestry in West Africa, Central America and South-east Asia within the next 5 years, while pie chart indicates spendings of the projects for the first year.

The table provides information about the projected costings for sustainable forestry in West Africa, Central America and South-east Asia within the next 5 years, while pie chart indicates spendings of the projects for the first year.
#information #costings #forestry #west #africa #america #south-east #asia #years #spendings #projects #first #year
The table provides information about the projected
costings
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 for sustainable forestry in West Africa, Central America and
South-east
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Southeast
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 Asia within the next 5 years,
while
pie
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the pie
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 chart indicates
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the spendings
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spendings
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spending
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of
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 the projects for the first year.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen from the table that
South-east
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Southeast
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 Asia will spend more money
among
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on
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 the three projects, with a massive expenditure on salaries from
pie
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the pie
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 chart. As is presented in the table, the environmental projects
on
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in
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 three different locations
varies
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 considerably.
For instance
, the majority (30 million dollars) of those on
spendings
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spending
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 belong to
South-east
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Southeast
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 Asia,
also
 for the next years it will provide the highest amount of money.
Whereas
, West Africa will have a tiny proportion of expenses, which is
less
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approximately triple
at
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in
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 the first year.
Moreover
, the forestry sustainable costs of Central America
includes
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 20 million dollars, but the following years will be experiencing only a small amount of funds.
According to
 the pie chart, the expenditure in the first year will be divided into four sections,
such
 as salaries, set-up costs, training and office expenses.
Therefore
, the salaries of workers form
a
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half of
costs
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the costs
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,
while
trainings
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training
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 and office expenses
include
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are
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 equal proportions with 10% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provides" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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