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These days many people prefer online shopping to conventional shopping. What are the advantages and disadvantages of online shopping?

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Nowadays many people do more online shopping than conventional shopping. In
this
 essay, I will talk about the advantages of online shopping
such
 as effective use of
time
, and
cost effectiveness
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,
however
, I talk about its disadvantages
such
 as uncertainty about the quality and delivery issues.
Firstly
, I would start with the advantages of online shopping; one is the
time
 saving,
why
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 am I saying
this
? Life has become very busy most of the
time
 we do not even have
time
 to buy our home groceries,
however
with
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 online shopping it has become easier, where you can order whatever you want from different countries of the world.
This
 goes
together with
 cost choice, the buyer has an open market with different prices for the same article. I can give an example: I wanted to buy a smartphone for my husband I checked one specific brand from different suppliers
surprisingly
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 the prices were different and obviously I bought from the cheapest yet the quality was the same.
Thus
, I find that online shopping has added value to today's life.
Secondly
, I want to talk about its advantages as well. Here I will start with an uncertainty of quality that most of the
time
 the buyers have. I can explain
this
 in
this
 way; when buying something online we always see the picture the supplier uses for publicity and sometimes that photo is not typically the same as the product you are about to buy
and
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very often buyers are disappointed when the product is delivered. An additional disadvantage is the delivery issue, I can give an example I bought a gift for my mother
instead
 of being delivered to her home and it was sent to my place and with the
time
 of correcting that mistake it could not be delivered on
time
.
Lastly
, I would conclude by saying that online shopping is good
hence
, it gives an added value to our life,
Therefore
 suppliers should focus on how to address all challenges that it faces.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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